Easy now now, the dude put his music on and you guys are projecting all your hating of cheap young rappers onto the dude. This is destructive criticism!! I hope you guys are aware!
He has a hobby and wants to continue, he has the confidence to appear on film so don`t stick it all in his face!
I gave it a listen, its not good but its also not my thing. Don`t take all the comments on board here, they are crossing the border.
I wouldn`t include parts about guns&bullets, it won`t match your person. If you were a rapper who gotshot a few times, a complete badass, then go for it. But match your personality with your words more in a sense, keep it from the heart!
Try and get a match with the music and don`t go for the speedy rapping, it would sound better a little slower... I think a change in the soundtrack to match the music and slower, "firmer" way of say with the words will make it much better
Honestly, the pages of comments I read... Keep a lid on it lads!!